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Veronica Valeanu
[16.Mar.10 22:12]
Deniz, welcome!
the text's idea is food for thought.condensed form, controlled attitude. please revise the spelling mistakes.

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Veronica Valeanu
[17.Mar.10 07:27]
it's [taken]there.
[strained] perhaps, instead of []forced] - it could have been redundant
you can edit the text to make changes whenever you want

Deniz, i appreciate how much you try to render through words.
cheers,
VV

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Motoc Lavinia
[17.Mar.10 18:32]
I do appreciate it as a rhyming exercise/ my daughter is just learning them at the nursery , but come on, it is almost like a rap song. Try to relax it a bit more, play with that rigid form and see what happens...




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