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= Hello!:)
Corina Gina Papouis
[20.Nov.11 15:35]
Hi there and welcome on Agonia (English).
I wanted to love your poem but it has quite a few grammar errors:
1 - on the edge
2 - he can fly away
3 - in place
4 - both shapes
5 - to be loved
6- smarter

I know that once you make these changes your rhythm and rhyming will be out' the window, but I trust you'll work on it and ..make it shine for the reader :)

Cheers!
Corina

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= Hello!:)	Corina Gina Papouis [20.Nov.11 15:35]
Hi there and welcome on Agonia (English). I wanted to love your poem but it has quite a few grammar errors: 1 - on the edge 2 - he can fly away 3 - in place 4 - both shapes 5 - to be loved 6- smarter I know that once you make these changes your rhythm and rhyming will be out' the window, but I trust you'll work on it and ..make it shine for the reader :) Cheers! Corina