| = I like | Ottilia Ardeleanu [25.Jan.14 21:56] |
| this image "gyrfalcons-cloud" and this expression: "my guilt is saltier than the fleur de sel you can extract by squeezing it". I think that "inthere" should be: in there. | |
| = . | Dely Cristian Marian [26.Jan.14 03:10] |
| You know, Ottilia, it's like saying that you like my eyes, and it feels good for a blink... The second point it's about a more personal touch. Thanks | |
| = the day after...the life before | Corina Gina Papouis [27.Jan.14 22:25] |
| I read this as the moment of dust settling over, when the feeling of: 'I wish this prediction didn't come true' comes true, followed by its step sister: regret. I felt unsettled reading this as it has the magic of waking up the inner demon. In my opinion, waking up any feeling/ emotion/ entity in poetry is the goal. I love small poems with a big impact. More, please! | |
| = each | Dely Cristian Marian [31.Jan.14 09:59] |
| yesterday uses scintillas to imbide silence It doesn't matter how much water I drink whether I eat iron and steel Nature needs no preparings to strike It's more like the one-erratic-armed meteorite to me Thanks | |
| = diamonds don't hold in iron... | Romulus Campan [08.Feb.14 22:23] |
| You started absolutely stunning. Core metaphor. Ended up in poetry. Great though... Take care. rc | |
| = sometimes a good verse can sink the poetry | ion a [09.Feb.14 05:39] |
| i think Romulus is right, after such an uncompromising start, fading into lyricism kind of looks like a failure postpone present murder tears again | |