| = 2, 3 | Corina Gina Papouis [27.Jan.14 22:08] |
| small corrections! intimacy & greenhouse Cheers! PS lovely imagery in last stanza! Terra is an Eve that tempts the sun (I would cut off the it!) | |
| = I made | Ottilia Ardeleanu [27.Jan.14 23:22] |
| these corrections, thank you very much, Corina. | |