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= my opinion!
Marius Surleac
[22.Oct.08 19:25]
Losing ourselves in the sea of oblivion under the influence of nymph’s/mermaid’s songs!

Though I have to point that I don’t understand the sense of “of death light”, maybe you wanted to say “death’s light”. Also, can you explain me “siren nebulas” – is there a nebula that has the name Siren, or you wanted to say “siren’s nebulas”.

I like the idea here and my opinion is that the last two stanzas are very well shaped but the first two stanzas can be improved.

Best wishes,
Marius

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= my opinion!	Marius Surleac [22.Oct.08 19:25]
Losing ourselves in the sea of oblivion under the influence of nymph’s/mermaid’s songs! Though I have to point that I don’t understand the sense of “of death light”, maybe you wanted to say “death’s light”. Also, can you explain me “siren nebulas” – is there a nebula that has the name Siren, or you wanted to say “siren’s nebulas”. I like the idea here and my opinion is that the last two stanzas are very well shaped but the first two stanzas can be improved. Best wishes, Marius