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= !!!
Marius Surleac
[29.May.08 09:17]
The first part of the poem (first five stanzas) it is ok and flows perfectly. I suggest you to work a little bit to the syntax of the last three stanzas. It can get out of Workshop.
Cheers!
= Thanks!
Cornel Costea
[31.May.08 00:03]
Dear Oscar,
Thanks for your "wow...Great!" It's very important to me! I'll try to improve my text. I hope that it will be better. Cornel.
= It's time
Cornel Costea
[31.May.08 00:03]
Dear Marius,
I have modified the last three stanzas.Do you think that, now, the poem is better? Thanks a lot! Cornel.
= nice poem
Marius Surleac
[31.May.08 10:04]
Now it looks better and flows in one way in a fast at first but slower rhyme at the end of poem.
Sincerely,
Marius

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= !!!	Marius Surleac [29.May.08 09:17]
The first part of the poem (first five stanzas) it is ok and flows perfectly. I suggest you to work a little bit to the syntax of the last three stanzas. It can get out of Workshop. Cheers!

= Thanks!	Cornel Costea [31.May.08 00:03]
Dear Oscar, Thanks for your "wow...Great!" It's very important to me! I'll try to improve my text. I hope that it will be better. Cornel.

= It's time	Cornel Costea [31.May.08 00:03]
Dear Marius, I have modified the last three stanzas.Do you think that, now, the poem is better? Thanks a lot! Cornel.

= nice poem	Marius Surleac [31.May.08 10:04]
Now it looks better and flows in one way in a fast at first but slower rhyme at the end of poem. Sincerely, Marius