= an amazing collection.. | Corina Gina Papouis [16.Sep.08 15:02] |
..a precious charm bracelet of texts, short masterpieces of natural..with a twist. My favourite ones (if i am pushed against the wall here!) would probably be 1 and 2, however, 9, 10 and 8 come very close. I will reprioritise soon enough, i guess... Regards, Corina | |
= internatural - Corina | Edilberto González Trejos [17.Sep.08 02:02] |
Thanks a lot Corina... I still need to improve in these kind of texts, keep reading! All the best to you | |
= welcome back Songo! | Marius Surleac [18.Sep.08 22:44] |
Welcome back Songo! I like the imagery created here, a sort of haiku-like idea (but not haiku), shape, base - nature invades the soul, softness. Well done! Though I have some small observations: "my feeling's nest" or "my feelings' nest" instead of "my feelings nest". Also, I think that there should be "mindfully" instead of "mindful". Best wishes, Marius | |
= no, Marius! | Corina Gina Papouis [18.Sep.08 23:07] |
I disagree! 'Nest' is used as a verb here and 'mindful' - as an adjective (not adverb).. or so i believe..:) | |
= yes, but... | Marius Surleac [18.Sep.08 23:23] |
Corina, maybe you're right - I thought about that way but I wasn't sure! About "mindful" - I know that Songo used and adjective, but I found more appropriate to use the adverb! Songo will elude us! :) Best wishes, Marius | |
= answers and thanks | Edilberto González Trejos [19.Sep.08 07:16] |
Dear Marius, "my feelings nest", nest is used as a verb. "mindful" used as an adjective. It is more concise and musical. Best regards and thanks a lot for your comm`s and sensible observations! Truly SONGO | |
= gracias | Marius Surleac [19.Sep.08 13:54] |
Ok! Gracias Songo! Now is better. Cheers, Marius | |
= beautiful | Mike Aspros [06.Oct.08 07:30] |
I keep coming back to this poem, your verse is silk. This poem echo's deep ecology. best, Mike | |
= earth and poetry - Mike | Edilberto González Trejos [14.Oct.08 00:52] |
Thanks a lot MIKE! Indeed I made a performance during the Festival "Art for the Earth" in a show called "Poetry for the Earth", poetry and jazz. | |