| = !!! | Marius Surleac [18.Sep.08 21:56] |
| First, there is "infinite" instead of "infinit". Second, you should let spaces after commas. There are also some problems to the prosody; you don't respect the metrical structure and the rhyme - that's why the poem maybe would look better with blank verses. The poem doesn't have rhythm until the end – it’s diluted! | |