| = Please, drop "the" at the beginning of your last line ... | John Willy Kopperud [15.Nov.08 18:45] |
| ...the contour of patience is sufficient AND correct. Having said that, I like your idea here, it's original and it will like good once you have made the correction! Cheers from Willy | |
| = Still I read "the" patience. It's not proper English ... | John Willy Kopperud [17.Nov.08 09:58] |
| ...and it has no place in an otherwise good poem. Cheers from Willy | |
| = That's better! | John Willy Kopperud [19.Nov.08 09:20] |
| It does look better without the odd error, doesn't it? Thank you for revising. Cheers from Willy | |