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Marius Surleac
[17.Jan.09 19:58]
There should be:
“that’s” instead of “thats”
“you feel it too” instead of “you feel it to”
“halves” instead of “halfs”

Another issue that can be solved is to work a bit to the aesthetic shape of the poem, to the expressions used.

Best wishes,
Marius




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