| = . | Laurenþiu Ion [30.Jan.09 22:21] |
| here are some mistakes and honestly, this is not poetry. | |
| = ok | Pomana Sorin [01.Feb.09 14:14] |
| ok, i never said i am a great artist, i just write what i feel, and if you could give me some pointers i would thank you. thank you any way for reading it. | |
| = . | Marius Surleac [01.Feb.09 15:32] |
| Sorin, there is a useless repetition for "I write" and this doesn't help the poem, as well the lack of mystery. I think you can improve the poem. Best wishes, Marius | |
| = . | Laurenţiu Ion [04.Feb.09 14:35] |
| so, you wrote what you felt! am I right? you felt to do those useless repetitions? i write and i write i write some more [..] try another one, honestly:) | |