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ion amariutei
[19.Nov.03 17:44]
crisp images, of an indelible quality, converge to a very credible emotional climax

just a couple of suggestions pertaining to clarity and *flow*:

instead of *sleepy tide through the uncertain/ the closer* perhaps *sleepy tide through uncertainty/ closer*

instead of *make myself up and run*, *finish my makeup and run*
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wendy angela
[19.Nov.03 20:14]
i do agree with your first suggestion, although it changes a bit the tide's territory:))

as for the beauty panel, i'd rather prove myself annoyingly persistent, and stick to the 'make myself up' version. the intention is to reveal the work of fiction to be done...of course, under the given circumstances:)))

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= nice	ion amariutei [19.Nov.03 17:44]
crisp images, of an indelible quality, converge to a very credible emotional climax just a couple of suggestions pertaining to clarity and flow: instead of sleepy tide through the uncertain/ the closer perhaps sleepy tide through uncertainty/ closer instead of make myself up and run, finish my makeup and run

= >asdf	wendy angela [19.Nov.03 20:14]
i do agree with your first suggestion, although it changes a bit the tide's territory:)) as for the beauty panel, i'd rather prove myself annoyingly persistent, and stick to the 'make myself up' version. the intention is to reveal the work of fiction to be done...of course, under the given circumstances:)))