| = brilliant idea. | kinnari thakker [14.Dec.03 18:48] |
| nice idea. but dont u think u have many cliches? calm waves, green grass, shining sun... | |
| = nice | Lauren Perazza [14.Dec.03 20:44] |
| I liked the it, but I think it had too many cliches. I thought this was the best line "Where the dark is always white." The whol idea is nice, but you could work on the use of different rhyme scheems and don't use so many cliches. | |